Scarlet Wilson is talking again about revisions today and showing her normally hidden, terrifying tables!
Today I have to admit that I'm probably going to terrify you with my scary tables - something we don't often use here at
Pink Heart Society. But there is a purpose to all this - honestly.
Today
I'm going to show you the before and after chart of revisions, in all
its ugly glory. Now, I could have just explained this, but it's so much
easier just to do Show and Tell.
So here it is.
Pelican Cove, which came to be known as The Boy Who Made Them Love
Again published in Dec 2011 in the UK. And this is what it looked like
before the revisions took place. Every scene summarised by a sentence,
hopefully showing its purpose. Along with some not so subtle notes
such as GO FOR IT (chp 4, scene10!)
So what happened
next? I got a ton of revisions. I had to completely change the ending
of the story and add more layers to my conflict. And that's where this
table came in.
Having a five page revision letter can
be a fairly daunting thing. I wanted to know how the changes would
effect my timeline, the flow of the story and the motivations. I wanted
to know what the impact would be if I jiggled things around.
So this.......
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Chapter
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Scene
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Purpose
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Pg
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1
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1 A & E
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Crisis point, meeting of Luke and Abby again after 5 years
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1-14
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2
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2 Side room
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Confirm rupture of 1st lady’s membranes, plans
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15-23
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3 Changing room/cathlab/changing room
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Luke’s confusion at why Abby is here, show his clinical
expertise, kisses her, establish sexual tension between them
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23-35
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3
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4 Canteen
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Establish jealous feelings
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36-40
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5 Office A & E
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1st lady staying/ health and safety issues
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40-44
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6 A & E
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Invites him to stay, shocked to meet her son
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44-52
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4
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7 Office
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Luke told he has to stay in situation
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53-57
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8 With Abby
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Finds out child is adopted and had ALL
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57-64
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9 With 1st Lady
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Background
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64-69
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10 Abby & Luke
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Walk home GO FOR IT
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69-73
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5
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11 Her house
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Meets son properly, sees the life she has created for them
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74-78
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12 Restaurant
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Build sexual tension between them, tells her about his
brother
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78-87
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6
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13 Her house
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Sex
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88-95
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14 Morning After
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Establish her reluctance to share
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95-100
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7
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15 A & E
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Equipment arrives, Rueben injured, bruising noted
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101-107
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16 Canteen
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Establishes her pain
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108-110
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17 A & E
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Perform DNA test, send it away
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111-112
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8
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18 A & E
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Taking him home
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113-115
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19 Her house
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Signs of coming out of remission
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115-117
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20 Her house
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Luke returns
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118-122
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21 Hospital 1st Lady
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Establish state of relationship
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122-130
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22 Returns home
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Support from Luke
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131-132
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9
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23 A & E
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Abby Discover DNA test results, tells her about
infertility
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133-140
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24 Cliff road
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Accident
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141-147
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25 Luke at scene
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Treating patient
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147-151
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26 Abby on bus
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Luke is trapped
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151-154
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10
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27 Cliff road
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Abby finds help
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155
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28 Luke trapped
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Sends message he loves her
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155-156
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29 Cliff road
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Brings help, faints when hears message
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157-161
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30 Hospital room
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Realises he’s alive, tells her he loves her
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161-166
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Epilogue
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31 House
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Adopted another child
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167-168
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Became this....... You'll notice that the entire DNA testing and big trauma accident in the second half of the book completely disappears!
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Chapter
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Scene
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Purpose
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Pg
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1
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1 A & E
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Crisis point, meeting of Luke and Abby again after 5 years
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1-15
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2
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2 Side room
3 Changing room/cathlab/changing room
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Confirm rupture of 1st Lady’s membranes, plans
Luke’s confusion at why Abby is here, show his clinical
expertise, kisses her, establish sexual tension between them
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16-38
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3
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4 Canteen
5 Office A & E
6 A & E
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Establish jealous feelings
1st lady staying/health and safety issues
Invites him to stay, meet son
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39-55
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4
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7 Office
8 With Abby
9 With 1st Lady
10 Abby & Luke
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Luke told he has to stay in situation
Finds out child is adopted and has ALL
Background
Walk home GO FOR IT
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56-76
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5
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11 Her house
12 Restaurant
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Meet son properly, sees the life she has created for them
Build sexual tension between them, tells her about letting
brother down
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77-92
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6
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13 Her house
14 Morning after
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Sex/condom issues
Establish her reluctance to share
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93-106
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7
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15 Beach
16 Evening picnic
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Spend day at beach, he does things with Rueben he wanted
to do with brother
Establish Luke’s frustration at parenting
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107-123
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8
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17 A & E
18 Canteen
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Equipment arrives, Rueben injured, bruising noted
Establishes her pain, his starting to connect
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124-134
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9
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19 A & E
20 Her house
21 Her house
22 Hospital 1st Lady
23 Returns home
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Taking him home – alone
Signs of him coming out of remission
Luke returns
Establish state of relationship
Support from Luke
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135-154
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10
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24 A & E
25 Outside A & E
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1st Lady goes into labour and has baby girl –
the effect this has on Abby
To show both are scared about relationship & Rueben’s
health
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155-166
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11
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26 Her house
27 Hospital appt
28 Bone marrow
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He arrives to show support & take them to appointment.
Abby’s fears of losing Rueben
Establish risks for Rueben
She crumbles & leaves, he stays firm
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167-180
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12
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29 Bone marrow
30 Outside hosp
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Dr diagnoses panic attacks
He tells her he’ll stay with her & proposes
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181-189
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Epilogue
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31 House
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Adopt another child
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Now, I know tables can be confusing. But really, it's just an extended and amended timeline.
It's also really useful from a
Goal, Motivation and Conflict perspective. Just really simplified.
And the planner in me NEEDS this. I need to be able to see visually, methodically how I am doing everything.
Lots of people use other methods - pinboards, scrivner. post-it notes, One Note. There are lots of different ways of putting your story out there in a simplified manner.
So how do you do yours????